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About Jeanie

I am President of Loiacono Literary Agency, LLC. I have been a literary agency for thirteen years and have over sixty clients and have sold over 200 books to date.

THOUGHTS ON CRITIQUE GROUPS by Buzz Bernard

THOUGHTS ON CRITIQUE GROUPS

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MAY 8, 2014 BY BUZZ BERNARD LEAVE A COMMENT

In a recent blog, I discussed the importance to a novice writer, one with aspirations of becoming professionally published, of not trying to learn the craft in isolation.  I strongly recommended interacting with other writers.  One of the most common ways of doing this is to become part of a critique group.

There are some authors who don’t believe in critique groups, but I do.  Joining a critique group isn’t the only way to improve your craft, but it is one of the most common.

I know a little bit about critique groups since I’ve been part of one for almost 14 years.  I’ve become its facilitator, not because I’m the best writer in the pack (I’m not), but because I’m the only remaining charter member.

Here are a few things I’ve learned over the years:

Some groups are better than others by dint of having members that “have been               around the block a few times,” that is, have learned the craft.

Size is important.  The Goldilocks number for participants seems to be around 8 or 10.  Fewer, and the feedback is too limited.  More, and the discussions become too lengthy and unwieldy.  Folks lose interest after a couple of hours of bantering back and forth.

It’s important to give positive reinforcement when critiquing.  I don’t mean that you need to tell people their writing is good when it’s not, but there’s usually some element of an individual’s effort that is praiseworthy.  Let them know about that, then point out areas where improvements can be made.  Keep it positive.  I’ve always learned from the criticisms and suggestions I’ve received, but it was the “attaboys” that truly kept me going.

The person being critiqued shouldn’t feel compelled to defend himself.  A critique group isn’t a debating society.  It’s a mutual aid club.  If you’re on the defensive, that means you’ve already lost the battle: your writing didn’t accomplish what you wanted or didn’t convey the message you wished.  Be quiet and learn.

I remember one instance early in my critiquing career when a young lady brought a piece to our group she had written about a family tragedy, the death of a brother or sister or mother or some such event.  It was heart-rending and emotional.  It wasn’t badly written.  As I recall, she was seeking a commercial audience for it.

I gave her kudos for what she’d done, but suggested the piece lacked a real story.  I felt that beyond the theme of tragic death–which it seems we hear about almost daily these days–she really hadn’t done anything to get the reader involved, in other words, really caring about the person who died.  Oops.  She took that as personal attack, stalked out of the group, and never returned.

It wasn’t my intent to hurt her.  Given her emotional state, maybe I should have just said Sorry for your loss, nice piece.  But I assumed she was there in an effort to make what she’d written better.  Lesson: If you aren’t interested in improving your writing and are just looking for pats on the back, don’t go to a critique group.  Read the stuff to your mother.

Keep in mind the feedback and comments you, as a writer, receive are subjective.  There is no hard and fast, objective scoring sheet in this business.  Evaluate the suggestions you’re offered.  You don’t have to accept every one.  If, however, you keep getting the same ones over and over, well . . .

Finally, a side benefit to a critique group is networking, the opportunity to interact with other writers.  You can benefit from those who have gone before you.  You can find out who the really good writing instructors and editors are.  Which conferences and workshops give you the most bang for the buck.  And if necessary, you can probably find a shoulder to cry on.  Believe me, we’ve all needed one of those at some point in our careers.

How about you?  What’s been your experience with critique groups?

 

SUPERCELL by Buzz Bernard to be the “Flagship Daily Deal”

SUPERCELL by Buzz Bernard to be the “Flagship Daily Deal”

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This is great news: SUPERCELL has been selected by Amazon as its Kindle “Flagship Daily Deal” for May 21st. Now to be honest, I’m not sure exactly what “Flagship” means, except I’m told it’s “very rare” and a “top deal.”
In my own little small-time novelist universe, I’d like to think of it as my NYT full-page ad. It’s how my publisher and I can make an effort to compete with the big guns in the thriller business.

Thus, I’ll make my periodic appeal for your help. Reviews! I’d love for SUPERCELL to hit the ground in a full-out sprint on May 21. The more reviews up on Amazon, the faster SUPERCELL gets out of the starting blocks.

So, if you’ve read the book–or know someone who has–and haven’t posted a review yet, it takes only a few minutes. And this small-time novelist will be eternally grateful.

Oh, and spread the word. May 21. SUPERCELL for Kindle: $1.99! Cheap thrills! www.buzzbernard.com Represented by Loiacono Literary Agency www.loiaconoliteraryagency.com Published by BelleBooks www.bellebooks.com

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On this day of your life, I believe God wants you to know that you will only benefit from resisting the temptation to think immediately about the worst possible outcome.

On this day of your life, I believe God wants you to know that you will only benefit from resisting the temptation to think immediately about the worst possible outcome.

When something comes up, when something happens in your life, that disrupts the easy “flow,” it is always better to bless it than to damn it. Try to see it as nothing serious. It most cases, it will not be.

Jumping to conclusions mired in negativity only thwarts the process by which your mind can stay clear, and thus find a way out of the momentary dilemma.

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Buzz Bernard’s SUPERCELL journal entry – May 5th

SUPERCELL “journal” entry for May 5 (Metcalf, the leader of the film crew, is Chuck’s nemesis):

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THE CHASE TEAM had spent Saturday in Tulsa and used the time for personal pursuits. Ziggy, Nosher, Boomie and Willie Weston rented clubs at a nearby golf course and played eighteen. Gabi and the two women working with Global-American [the film company] toured the Tulsa Garden Center, while Ty and Chuck hung around the motel. Metcalf mostly bitched, proclaiming Tulsa the tedium capital of the world.

Now, on Sunday, Chuck vectored the team northward into eastern Nebraska, leading the small caravan through green, rolling farm country speckled with evergreens and oaks. Tidy small towns, the kind that once might have graced Norman Rockwell paintings, greeted them at regular intervals. Homes with front porches and rocking chairs, small churches advertising potluck suppers, and Dairy Queens with full parking lots proclaimed middle America.— www.bellebooks.com www.buzzbernard.com

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Dalton Magazine’s May issue features Amber Lanier Nagle’s book Project Keepsake

Dalton Magazine’s May issue features Amber Lanier Nagle’s book Project Keepsake, a collection of short stories told in first-person by both writers and aspiring writers about their treasured keepsakes and mementos.  From buckeyes to pocket knives to pound cake pans to rings to fishing lures, each keepsake—and each story—is unique, yet each reveals common attributes that bind us together and celebrate the glorious human experience.

http://www.epageflip.net/title/4911  “Worth Keeping”

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On this day of your life, I believe God wants you to know that the mode in which the inevitable comes to pass is through effort.

On this day of your life, I believe God wants you to know that the mode in which the inevitable comes to pass is through effort.

Oliver Wendell Holmes said that, and he was right. While God is there to help us every step along the way, there is no free pass in life, and what occurs occurs as a result of the energy you give it.

That is true in all ways. It is true about physical energy, mental energy, emotional energy, and spiritual energy. Where are you putting your energy right now?

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Super Supercell review!

Super Supercell review!

Supercell
H.W. “Buzz” Bernard
Bell Bridge Books
c/o BelleBooks
P.O. Box 300921 Memphis, TN 38130
Ebook ISBN: 9781611943542, $9.56 Kindle edition
Printed ISBN: 9781611943399, $14.95 paperback Amazon.com

Elizabeth Winks
Reviewer

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Hurry! An EF-5 tornado is barreling down on you! Do you know what to do to remain safe? Luckily for you, all you have to do is turn the page: you’re out on the Great Plains with Chuck Rittenburg and his motley storm chasing crew attempting to film one of nature’s most beautiful – and dangerous – phenomena.

Jerry Metcalf, of Global-American Cinema, drops by Chuck Rittenburg’s grubby apartment in Norman, Oklahoma, in the hopes of dragging Chuck out of his self-imposed retirement. Once a nationally acclaimed stormchaser, Chuck stopped chasing – recreationally and professionally – when a couple was tragically killed on one of his Thunder Road Tours storm treks. So when Metcalf offers him $500,000 to help track down a supercell storm, one that must include an EF-5 tornado, Chuck immediately turns him down. Yet, Chuck, though rundown, is still intelligent. He contacts Metcalf, in the hopes that maybe this opportunity, but more importantly, the money, could help get his life back on track, redeem himself in the eyes of his estranged son, Ty. Chuck states that he will chase for one million dollars, and with reluctance, Metcalf agrees. There’s still a catch, though: Chuck only has two weeks to find this perfect storm…or he doesn’t get any of the money.

H.W. “Buzz” Bernard, talented author of Supercell and two other novels, thickens the plot by introducing two brothers who, under the guise of paramedics, chase storms to steal from the wreckage. In order to stop these bandits, an FBI agent, Gabriela Medeiros, tags along on Chuck’s filming expedition pretending to be a journalist. Not only is Chuck now attempting to find the film crew the perfect storm, but he’s also trying to meet up with the wanted criminals, too. Bernard gave his main character as difficult a situation as possible, which was enjoyable for me as the reader because it kept me wondering if Chuck was going to be able to handle everything tossed his way. It added to the suspense.

Speaking of suspense, upon reading the novel, I often times found Bernard’s writing style to be formulaic. What I mean by this is that there was a clear pattern to how the plot would rise and fall as it built up to the climax. Chuck and the crew would go through a series of advancements and setbacks in a sort of obvious way. At times, I found myself thinking, “Okay, here’s another setback, but the next reversal will be one forward.” Yet, Bernard was able to make the ending of the novel unclear through the use of a complex plot line that finally comes together at the climax in an unsuspected way.

Once the plot pattern was established, though, I decided to Google Bernard. I had a feeling he might have been a scientist and, sure enough, he had been a meteorologist who had minored in creative writing. His ability to explain meteorological terms succinctly and clearly made for smooth reading and added realism to the piece. For example, Chuck explains CAPE and CIN to Gabi and his son, Ty: “‘It’s CAPE and CIN,’ Chuck said, and spelled out the acronyms. ‘CAPE stands for Convective Available Potential Energy. It’s a measure of how much energy – fuel – there is in the atmosphere for thunderstorm development. The more energy there is, the bigger and nastier the storms are likely to be.'” Bernard peppers the novel with explanations such as these and through these simple definitions of more complex theories, the reader can understand what is going on without being bogged down by the science aspect. He even includes a glossary at the end of the book that contains all the terminology used in the book. I really appreciated that about Bernard’s style.

Overall, I thought that Bernard was able to craft quite the thriller novel through the blend of science and creative writing. Personally, this book was exceptionally thrilling because Bernard and I are sort of opposites: whereas he was a professional scientist who did writing on the side, I am a writer who’s minoring in meteorology. Anyone who finds tornadoes and massive storms fascinating will surely enjoy this book, as I have. It’s like talking a walk on the wild side – but a heck of a lot safer.

Mama Had a Saying

Mama Had a Saying

Son, never get up on the wrong side of the bed.”  How many times have we heard Mama say this?

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The day was doomed even before entering the office. The wilted and leafless roses greeted the entrance. The portrait of Sir Winston sneered and stared down his lofty Churchill nose at my presence.

It all started because Mama’s advice was ignored.  A grievous error. A voice inside pleaded ignorance.  It argued, “Which is the wrong side, or the right side of a bed?” Mama’s eyes sent scorn from her heavenly perch with silence, shaking her head again. “Will that boy ever learn?”

The jails are full of malefactors who plead ignorance.  Nobody listens.  Once the deed’s done, it’s done. And since one can only get out of bed once a day, caution is commended.  So mama said.  She was never wrong.

There are relentless retribution gods, you know, sent forth to adjust the scales of justice.  Dull razors make band aids essential. Try parting your hair on some days. Public humiliation occurs.  Mama warned, nobody listened. She was never wrong.

The wrong side of the bed causes coffee spill on the white sofa.  It makes cereal stale. It sours orange juice. It mocks everything we do. We curse it. Some days are irredeemable, even as they begin. Who devises such torments…from which side of the bed do they slither?

Getting dressed is a clownish affair.  Nothing matches.  Mama’s voice echoes, “No stripes with plaids.” As an additional warning, “Don’t get too big for your britches.”

Mama’s voice even speaks from shoes. “Son, don’t start out on the wrong foot.” A voice inside wants to answer, “But Mama, which one is right, which one is wrong?” Somewhere in the ether it thunders, “Son, quit asking stupid questions.”  Was your mama like this?

     “Young man, don’t hang out with the wrong crowd, ya hear?”  She probably heard an expletive cross my lips. So did the retribution gods. They laughed hideously at my flat tire.

Have you ever looked at mirror after lunch?  There it is, a huge red glob of spaghetti on your white shirt? Snickers and giggles follow you from the restaurant.  You are fixated on that spot all day.  No work gets done. Such are the consequences from the wrong side of the bed.

All prospects of making rational decisions are impossible when getting up on the wrong side of the bed, or starting out on the wrong foot. Forget dinner, especially tacos.  They will laugh uncontrollably throughout the night. Does no good to shake your fist at the heavens and complain, “Well, Mama, are you satisfied?  Look, a clean plate.  I thought about the starving Chinese.” Does your mother treat you so shamefully?

Mama is usually right, not wrong, especially about what’s right and what’s wrong. But we ignore vicarious advice, preferring experiential knowledge. Backsliding is inbred into our nature, just like crossing our fingers in case of failure to obey. After all, we were born into trouble as the sparks fly upward. Do you feel this way, too?

It is possible to trick the retribution gods. Tonight, when you go to bed, try the sofa. You might not sleep too well, but there’s only one way in, one way out.  Play the odds…let the gods know that Mama didn’t raise no fool!

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There is no moral to this story, only a caveat…Mama is never wrong!

Bud Hearn

May 2, 2014

 

 

Buzz Bernard’ Tornado Almanac – Strengths

Buzz Bernard’ Tornado Almanac – Strengths

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SUPERCELL – Nominated for Georgia Author of the Year 2014 – Fiction Novel

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When Chuck, a meteorologist, ventures out on his own to form a company which does storm chasing, the big bucks roll in until lightning strikes… literally. Out of work and living in a dive, he is approached by Hollywood with a million dollar deal – lead cinematographers to a violent EF-4 or -5 tornado. But they are not the only ones striking it rich with twisters, a brotherly pair of thieves are looting and killing immediately after tornadoes. Throw in an undercover FBI agent and Chuck’s son, a former Green Beret who is a less-than-willing participant, and you have non-stop, breath-catching, chill-bumps-all-over-your-body excitement page after page.

 

 

On this day of your life, I believe God wants you to know that it is not necessary for you to report everyone’s mistakes to them, much less to give them corrections.

On this day of your life, I believe God wants you to know that it is not necessary for you to report everyone’s mistakes to them, much less to give them corrections.

It can be difficult, when you think you know a better way to say something, to keep that to yourself.  But try. Unless someone’s life or safety depends on it, do try.

You would not welcome someone else pointing out your own misstep, or less-than-totally-efficient approach to something. Why point it out to them? Do you see it as your duty in life to make sure that all goes the way you think it ‘should’?

That would be an inaccurate assessment of your soul’s grander purpose. www.CWGPortal.com